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Work on thesis statement makes sense with the introduction



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Monday, January 23, 2012

The Pick Pocket

Author's Note: A story about David

1/23/12

David froze, checking his pockets. Where was the money? He started to search his house frantically searching for his money. He rushed into his bedroom and tore his dresser apart searching for his money. He didn't find anything so he went searching into his kitchen throwing his coffee maker on the ground and shattered it. Searching through all the his containers and drawers and couldn't find it. He screamed in frustration. He sat down furious that he couldn't find his money the rent on his apartment. This was his 3rd and final strike for not paying his rent and he will be thrown out. He was thinking trying to replace his steps on where he could have lost it. All he did today was take the bus to go get medication for his sore back. He rushed out the door and take a bus to the pharmacy. When he arrived he busted through the door and headed to the clerk wondering if the had found money today. The clerk shook his head no and David was stunned wondering where is money has went. He walked out the door in disbelieving that he lost his rent money that was due the next day. In shock he fall over and fainted.

When he came too he realized he was in the hospital and was wondering why he was here. The doctor came over and said that the police had found him unconscious laying on the curb. He still didn't know why he was still here. Then the doctor finally told him that he was in the hospital because both of his legs were shattered. A car in a high speed chase ran over him in to be a distraction thus shattering both of his legs. David asked the doctor how would he pay for this he had no home, no job, and no money. As well as having none of that he had no parents and the closest relative is living in China for business. He had no one to bail him out. He sat there for countless hours recovering for his latest wound.

Then nurse said there was someone to see him a short chubby little man walked in. David had no clue who this was. He soon realized that it was one of the workers from the pharmacy he went in he also knew that was the man who accidentally bumped into him. The chubby man introduced himself as Fredrick. Fredrick looked sad when he introduced himself. Fredrick told the story that instead of accidentally bumping into him he actually pick pocketed him. David sat stock in disbelieving that this story wasn't true and died of a heart attack. Fredrick was stunned standing not knowing what to do. He left in silence out of the hospital.

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